ช่วยรบกวนติติง การเขียนภาษาอังกฤษให้หน่อยค่ะ

สวัสดีค่ะ หนูเป็นนักศึกษาชั้นปีที่ 1 แล้วได้รับมอบหมายจากอาจารย์ให้พูดบรรยายภาพอะไรก้ได้ที่เกี่ยวข้องกับ Tomorrow ตอนนี้ลองแต่งและเรียบเรียงเสร็จแล้ว แต่ไม่รู้ว่าตัวเองเขียนถูกรึเปล่า
คือเนื้อเรื่องจะผู้ประมาณเกี่ยวกับหนัง Pretty Womanที่นางเอกมีความฝันอยากจะมีชีวิตที่ดี และก็พูดถึงความฝันตัวเองที่อยากจะมีชีวิตที่ดีเช่นกัน แต่ก่อนที่จะมีชีวิตที่ดีได้ต้องพัฒนาภาาาอังกฤษก่อน รบกวนผู้รู้ช่วยตรวจสอบให้หน่อยนะคะ
นี่เป็นภาพที่ตัวเองใช้บรรยายค่ะ ^^
และนี่เป็นเนื้อเรื่องทั้งหมดค่ะ
I believe everyone has own dream which has different dreams. Someone wants to be a doctor. Someone wants to be judges or someone wants to be astronaut. But the most importantly, everyone has a dream together. That’s Living be better.
Before talking about picture, I will tell you this is the first film that I was watching. I ‘ve never been watching film before. Until my brainy friends suggested me to try watching film for practicing English. After that, I chose “Pretty Woman” to watch and it became my favorite film.
Ok, Pretty Woman is a 1990 American romantic comedy film directed by Garry Marshall from a screenplay by J. F. Lawton. The film stars Richard Gere and Julia Roberts. There was so much chemistry between Richard Gere and Julia Roberts So, this film is a story about Vivian Ward, an attractive young prostitute in Hollywood. Actually, she didn’t want to do this. She had no choice. She just wants to see the world wide and get out of a bad life and want to meet someone who sees her more than the body of money to exchange money. Then, her dream came true. Destiny brought Edward who is a wealthy businessman to her. He was driving from Beverley hill is lost. He asked direction but no one volunteered to lead him. Except, Vivian. After that, there are many stories that make Edward see her beautiful spirit. Finally, he hired her to live together. It is a different love. So, her life is changed forever like a fairy tale.
For this picture, It’s polo match scene. Edward gave Vivian to go into Polo Match. But Vivian did not dare go into because she was not confident in herself and feared others look down on her as a prostitute. Although she had been transformed a British lady by Edward. And thus, he took her hand and encouraging that "You look great, you look like a lady. We're gonna have a wonderful time”. So, she accepted into the polo match with the reason that there are still people who valued her. That’s “Edward”
After, I watched Pretty Woman I look back to myself. I think that I and Vivian also have same a part of life. I have my dream to speak English like a native speaker. I was excited all the time when I see foreigner or Thai people who is speak English by Automatically. I feel it’s so cool. I wish I could do that. You know? I believe English is important that is universal language. I can learn so many new things if I’m a bilingual or multilingual language. But now, I need to improve my English because I think I just can communicate, but it’s not fluent. So, there are 2 problems of my English. As follow my listening and my confident.
First, about listening skill. I know listening is a key to learn language but my learning English in the past. Mostly, I was learning about writing. My school or my teacher usually tech only how to remember vocabulary and how to be writing correctly by grammatical. But I didn’t understand even though I was determined to learn English. So, I think I learn with wrongs way all the time because I should learn listening skill before other skills. Sometimes, I think If I have a chance to learn English with the true way, I would can do incredible things.
Next, my second problem is my confident. I think environment means a lot. Not everyone is lucky. You know what I mean? Nobody speaks English. It’s quite strange to speak English with your language. If you’re the only one standing out talking in English. People might make fun of you. There was someone said, “Oh my god, look at her.” It might be like me when I was studying in high school. And then, I had to present in front of my class in English. And then, I made mistake and forgot the scripts. I could remember many people in the class. They made fun of me. After that time, I always was nervous and was so afraid when I speak English or even I will stutter and no confident to speak English.
Lastly, that’s all my today. I just will tell you. I don’t let my dreams be dreams because I think everyone is differences backgrounds.  I was gonna follow my dream like Vivian. Although, I still can’t speak English like a native speaker. I will never give up on something my really want. However impossible things my seem, there’s always a way. I don’t let anything stop me. So, I hope I’d love to do that one day and there is someone to sees the worth of my life. Finally, my tomorrow will be better like Vivian in Pretty Woman.
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