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There are two bar charts show the percentages of hiring and average monthly earning that are to be composed of the normal and disable people group. In the disable people group can divide two sub group are non-severely disable and severely disable. The total of information is got from some country.
Firstly, the most of people who are highest hired or 90 percent are in the normal people group that they gain salary over $2,000. However, the number of people who are employed in the non-severely disable group has the percentage not less than the normal people group which approximately stands at 85 percent which get earning about $1,500 a month. Therefore, the percentage both of the normal people group and non-severely disable people group are not different significant. It shows that employment has equality both the normal people group and the non-severely disable group. In the contrary, the least percentage of people who are lowest employed is in the severely disable people group. There are approximately 25 percentages of the severely people group who get income $1,000 a month.
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ขอบคุณล่วงหน้าค่ะ
Firstly, the most of people who are highest hired or 90 percent are in the normal people group that they gain salary over $2,000. However, the number of people who are employed in the non-severely disable group has the percentage not less than the normal people group which approximately stands at 85 percent which get earning about $1,500 a month. Therefore, the percentage both of the normal people group and non-severely disable people group are not different significant. It shows that employment has equality both the normal people group and the non-severely disable group. In the contrary, the least percentage of people who are lowest employed is in the severely disable people group. There are approximately 25 percentages of the severely people group who get income $1,000 a month.