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Question
Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? People should sometimes do things they don’t enjoy doing. Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer.

Answer
Have you ever heard of the phase said that when you get out of your comfort zone, live will begin? From my view, I’m strongly agree with people should sometimes do things they don’t enjoy doing. To clarify my perspective, I will illustrate you by the following reasons.
Back in the childhood, I didn’t like History subject and I believe that most of the students have some school’s subjects which they might not like neither. However, I had to patiently study and get it through in the end. Now, I proud myself to my graduation certificate. It won’t happen anyway if I didn’t attempt to overcome the things that I’m detested.  
Moving on to the working life. When I was work as a waitress, I really enjoy serving people their meal, preparing entrées or checking their bill. Nevertheless, I had to do cleaning as well. There were no choices if I wanted to remain working I had to do that chore or I lost my job. A few weeks later I found my cleaning skill improved and got a praised from my manager. Cleaning stuff isn’t my problem anymore.
All in all, I couldn't agree more that people sometimes should do things they don’t enjoy whether they willing to do or not. When they look back they will realize that they capable to do that and overcome that thing. They will get more confidence and fulfill themselves. It’s just something that they can’t buy or gain from anywhere. They have to experience by confront it.
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Can you rewrite it if I give you some advice? I don't think I have time to go through everything.

-If this is an essay to turn in in class, make it formal, that is, by not shortening any words; e.g. "I am" and "did not".
-Fix the subject-verb agreement.
-Use relative clauses if need be.
-Pay attention to the tenses.
-Be mindful of the parts of speech. For example, you left out the verb 'to be' in many places and didn't form a gerund where you're supposed to.
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