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Memorable Experience in My Trip
    Last vacation I went to the trip in Hua Hin, I had a great memorable experience in my trip. Hua Hin was memorable experience for me. Because, it was the first time that I went to travel with my best friend. We went to Hua Hin by train. There were three peoples went to the trip included my friend her name was Aum, Aum’s brother his name was Onglee and me. We got on the train at 8 o’clock. On the train number 255, there were many peoples who was traveling on the train. Men or women who was selling food and water on the train. The officer who was security and ticket inspector on the train. There were toilets which allowing our personal mission while the train was running. We took time to travel about 4 hours, from Salaya train station to Hua Hin train station. We arrived Hua Hin at midday. First of all we did when arrived Hua Hin, we went to check-in at Fulay Guest House. It was a common room by the beach. After that, we brought the bags to the room by ourselves. Later I took a shower while the others took a nap. Then we went to lunch near the beach. After that we went to swimming at the beach while we were swimming, I looked around on the beach. The beach was nice place because, this place there was a cool weather and good area for recreation with friends or family in the summer. After we swam. We walked up on the beach, collect shells and took photos together. Later we went to the room. We were tired. But, it was very fun because we got to travel together. We returned to Salaya by train. Finally, in the trip we were joyful and very exciting when we got on the train. It was in my life experience for traveling that very exciting, impressive with my best friend and nice place. I will don’t forget this memorable experience.


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