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I found some place from the website.That place shouldn't be in this country, and it yet be in the capital city, then I have to prove it as fake or real.
If mention about the place that many country try to hide away,try to refuse time by time,try to stop every career that work around there and not accept in officially,but around the street you still found it and it's so easy to found too.I'm talking about 'Brothel' ,yet even then, many people try to avoid this word an use 'Massage Parlor' instead.Yes, I found some brothel from the internet....
....such that without charge.
I never went to that place or any about before. It's my first time, might as well,I should go for once,and this place is very proper for a new guy like me,you know,it's free,at least for the first time of a real sexual experience.
When I finished the class at 5.00 pm,I came back to my house,took a shower, got a cool dress,prepared to meet the first girl who will be making me losing virginity. I checked the internet again,the location isn't too far,just 20 minutes.I hopped on the bike and rode away.
When I came to the entrance of the place,the location it's deep into the end of the alley.Then I was just thinking about the condom,I forgot to bring it here.Damm it!,I have to buy the condom before,I looked around me and found 7,I then went there immediately.
I bought a condom with the shy felling,cause it was my first time, even I ever watched some programe in youtube about "how to buy a condom" but the real life is not the same,it's not joking like that.For a few second,I walked into the restroom nearby for took a pee.
At the moment,I saw one girl,I think she maybe 20 years old,she sat on the chair in front of the women restroom.She looks beautiful but grief,but I didn't interest too much and went into the restroom.When I came out,I saw the same girl with the man,I thought he could be her parent,They were talking.
"I won't to do that."
"You have to do it,you don't have a choice.Now,get in the car"
"Please! I beg you,I'm not ready yet."
"What about the debt that you owed me...No more question"
I thought he isn't her dad, then.
He then dragged her into the car at the back seat, and went to start the car,and drove away quickly.
Even though, it wasn't my business, but the conscious mind told me I have to pursue that car and help the girl.Then, I moved quickly to my bike,started it and drove follow behind the car immediately.
The car drove into the alley such as the entrance to go to the brothel.Just thought for the good things,it might not be that place that was a point of the car, but around 5-10 minutes later,My bike and the car stopped at the brothel finally,it was a bad news.
The facade of the brothel look like the picture on the internet.It indicated that the location is correct.The building is medium size,3 floor
We parked our vehicle at the car park underground.I thought they didn't know that someone was pursuing them because I made a proper distance between us and I tried to hide them nearby.Oh! I saw the man was coming out from the car.and shit! I saw him were carrying the girl,she loosed her conscious. I thought the man medicated her,like a news form the TV,taxi driver medicated passenger.He went into the elevator,I have to help her,but how? The elevator just gone.
OK! I looked at the floor state,it stopped on 3rd floor.I went up to the stair with the quick speed for pursued them with in time.When I arrived at 3rd floor,I didn't see them.The 3rd floor is too many room,around 30 rooms,and nobody arrived outside the room.I tried to walk around there,just for observed.For awhile,2-3 minutes later,I saw the weather walked out from the elevator,he brought the food such that I thought someone may be ordered it,maybe tried from the sex activity,I just thought for nothing.
Then,I got an idea that for find the girl.I walked to him and asked him to brought me to the restroom. Use 2-3 minutes,for argued,and he brought me to the front of the restroom,eventually,with his loth reaction.Just a few second,I took a lid on the food table wheelchair that the weather brought with,and hit him the face with the most force,It's worked,He was comatose,and I dragged his body into the rest room and switched our suit.
I came out and began to traced the girl.I drag the food table wheelchair slowly,like nothing happened.But I felt this suit was too cramp and the ambience was very hot too.I started with the first room and knocked the door,for awhile,some guy opened it.
"The food is ready to serve,sir!"
I talked with a little excited,you know, cause I didn't do that before.
"What! I didn't order it"
I already know that,just asked for ceremony.
"Oh! The order said who that order this food is the girl that came with the man.Do you know where they are?"
"No" And he closed the door so forced.
I continued to the other room and said the same statement but no anyone saw them.Finally,the last room,I knocked the door again,but unpredictable,The girl around 30-40 year's old opened the door.
I didn't said anything,just walked away with the hopeless mood.All of the people who opened the door for me,I didn't saw anyone look like the guy who brought the girl here ,or maybe.....
Yes! Maybe they did it like the syndicate, maybe they are many people that help each other.If be like that,she was in very dangerous.I have to do something, but how.
Immediately,I saw the alarm button on the wall.Perfect!Alright,do it now!
waw waw waw waw
many people just came out little by a little,with the panic.I watched each of them with the pity eye-sight,some people left only underwear,someone dressed just a towel,all of men or women,but I can't concentrate about them,I have to focus about the girl.Where is she right now.
A few minutes later,Not anyone around here.Then I have to searched the room one by one,but now,it easy to do that because the door was halt opened.
But I didn't see her in any room until almost the last.Finally,I saw her sleep in the last room,Oh this room is the room that the old lady opened it to me a few minutes ago.She involved about kidnap the girl here,I didn't want to believe that,Nowadays,can't trust anybody even man or woman.She still lucky,I think they didn't do anything to her yet because she was still wearing the cloth,she just was tied up on the bed,I untied her immediately.
I tried to waked her up.She was just moving her body and opened the eyes slowly,probably the medicine.
"What is happening? Who you are?." She asked with the exhausted voice.
"I fluky saw that guy did it with you, at the 7, and think a bad thing it's gonna happen to you,so I follow you, until here.You were medicated.How do you fell?"
"Shit! I didn't think he will did it to me,bastard!.....and where he is right now?"
"Oh! I did something that made him runaway, oh! probably everybody around here" I said and laughed a little."Let's get out of here now,Maybe they come back."
"However,Thank you." She said to me.
I walked to the front of the door.Still no anybody around here.She walked behind me closely,I smelled the perfume from her body.It so sweet,that redolent body.But I didn't satisfied yet,the weather,in underwear part arrived at my front side.He looked so angry.of cause! I saw the wound at his face that I did it.
"I guess you didn't involve with him" She said.
"Go to the fire exit now!"I just saw the way to avoid him and said.
and we were then running both,didn't look behind.
Just a few second,we came to the car park,it still has a few people around here.I look around for find my bike,it may be closely.Suddenly, I accidental saw the man who kidnapped the girl,Oh! he didn't leave yet.I whispered to her for get down. The distance between him and us not too far,we hid behind some car.For a while,I heard the man said,probably on the phone.
"I got a problem!,I can't recorded the video.Some guy rang the fire alarm.I have to run away before,just for the worse case that some body accidental see us.......No,she is sleeping,I sent someone to watch her right now...Yes!.......Umm.....,just wait for it clam.......Don't worry,however,we will got the video,certainly! "
"Shit!She 's gone."
I heard the sound insert.I perked up my face a little for saw someone speaking.Not the other,She is the old lady that involved about,She was running to the man.
"What!...but she was tied up."
"I think it's not a normal,someone rang the alarm and used that moment untied her and brought her ran....and I think I know who he is."
"And who! is that jerk?"
"The guy that knocked the door,he ware the waiter suit but I think he is not the waiter.....Are you followed by someone?"
"Ah! I knew it!,some bike rode behind me,when I cam
,I didn't see then,the first time,I thought it just accident...sure! it's him".
Shit! They knew about me.
"I found that bike.Not missed,I remember,right here!"
It's such a bad luck. And now, how can I go to take my bike! They both are watching now! How can I cope with them? I'm not dare to face them,such a cowardly guy,if you didn't mind to say that.I looked at her,She looks like some sleepy person.
OK! Perhaps I should call some back up.I took my phone and sent the massage to my friend for com
and bring us away from this ugly place as soon as possible.
แต่งเรื่องสั้นภาษาอังกฤษเล่นๆ
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I found some place from the website.That place shouldn't be in this country, and it yet be in the capital city, then I have to prove it as fake or real.
If mention about the place that many country try to hide away,try to refuse time by time,try to stop every career that work around there and not accept in officially,but around the street you still found it and it's so easy to found too.I'm talking about 'Brothel' ,yet even then, many people try to avoid this word an use 'Massage Parlor' instead.Yes, I found some brothel from the internet....
....such that without charge.
I never went to that place or any about before. It's my first time, might as well,I should go for once,and this place is very proper for a new guy like me,you know,it's free,at least for the first time of a real sexual experience.
When I finished the class at 5.00 pm,I came back to my house,took a shower, got a cool dress,prepared to meet the first girl who will be making me losing virginity. I checked the internet again,the location isn't too far,just 20 minutes.I hopped on the bike and rode away.
When I came to the entrance of the place,the location it's deep into the end of the alley.Then I was just thinking about the condom,I forgot to bring it here.Damm it!,I have to buy the condom before,I looked around me and found 7,I then went there immediately.
I bought a condom with the shy felling,cause it was my first time, even I ever watched some programe in youtube about "how to buy a condom" but the real life is not the same,it's not joking like that.For a few second,I walked into the restroom nearby for took a pee.
At the moment,I saw one girl,I think she maybe 20 years old,she sat on the chair in front of the women restroom.She looks beautiful but grief,but I didn't interest too much and went into the restroom.When I came out,I saw the same girl with the man,I thought he could be her parent,They were talking.
"I won't to do that."
"You have to do it,you don't have a choice.Now,get in the car"
"Please! I beg you,I'm not ready yet."
"What about the debt that you owed me...No more question"
I thought he isn't her dad, then.
He then dragged her into the car at the back seat, and went to start the car,and drove away quickly.
Even though, it wasn't my business, but the conscious mind told me I have to pursue that car and help the girl.Then, I moved quickly to my bike,started it and drove follow behind the car immediately.
The car drove into the alley such as the entrance to go to the brothel.Just thought for the good things,it might not be that place that was a point of the car, but around 5-10 minutes later,My bike and the car stopped at the brothel finally,it was a bad news.
The facade of the brothel look like the picture on the internet.It indicated that the location is correct.The building is medium size,3 floor
We parked our vehicle at the car park underground.I thought they didn't know that someone was pursuing them because I made a proper distance between us and I tried to hide them nearby.Oh! I saw the man was coming out from the car.and shit! I saw him were carrying the girl,she loosed her conscious. I thought the man medicated her,like a news form the TV,taxi driver medicated passenger.He went into the elevator,I have to help her,but how? The elevator just gone.
OK! I looked at the floor state,it stopped on 3rd floor.I went up to the stair with the quick speed for pursued them with in time.When I arrived at 3rd floor,I didn't see them.The 3rd floor is too many room,around 30 rooms,and nobody arrived outside the room.I tried to walk around there,just for observed.For awhile,2-3 minutes later,I saw the weather walked out from the elevator,he brought the food such that I thought someone may be ordered it,maybe tried from the sex activity,I just thought for nothing.
Then,I got an idea that for find the girl.I walked to him and asked him to brought me to the restroom. Use 2-3 minutes,for argued,and he brought me to the front of the restroom,eventually,with his loth reaction.Just a few second,I took a lid on the food table wheelchair that the weather brought with,and hit him the face with the most force,It's worked,He was comatose,and I dragged his body into the rest room and switched our suit.
I came out and began to traced the girl.I drag the food table wheelchair slowly,like nothing happened.But I felt this suit was too cramp and the ambience was very hot too.I started with the first room and knocked the door,for awhile,some guy opened it.
"The food is ready to serve,sir!"
I talked with a little excited,you know, cause I didn't do that before.
"What! I didn't order it"
I already know that,just asked for ceremony.
"Oh! The order said who that order this food is the girl that came with the man.Do you know where they are?"
"No" And he closed the door so forced.
I continued to the other room and said the same statement but no anyone saw them.Finally,the last room,I knocked the door again,but unpredictable,The girl around 30-40 year's old opened the door.
I didn't said anything,just walked away with the hopeless mood.All of the people who opened the door for me,I didn't saw anyone look like the guy who brought the girl here ,or maybe.....
Yes! Maybe they did it like the syndicate, maybe they are many people that help each other.If be like that,she was in very dangerous.I have to do something, but how.
Immediately,I saw the alarm button on the wall.Perfect!Alright,do it now!
waw waw waw waw
many people just came out little by a little,with the panic.I watched each of them with the pity eye-sight,some people left only underwear,someone dressed just a towel,all of men or women,but I can't concentrate about them,I have to focus about the girl.Where is she right now.
A few minutes later,Not anyone around here.Then I have to searched the room one by one,but now,it easy to do that because the door was halt opened.
But I didn't see her in any room until almost the last.Finally,I saw her sleep in the last room,Oh this room is the room that the old lady opened it to me a few minutes ago.She involved about kidnap the girl here,I didn't want to believe that,Nowadays,can't trust anybody even man or woman.She still lucky,I think they didn't do anything to her yet because she was still wearing the cloth,she just was tied up on the bed,I untied her immediately.
I tried to waked her up.She was just moving her body and opened the eyes slowly,probably the medicine.
"What is happening? Who you are?." She asked with the exhausted voice.
"I fluky saw that guy did it with you, at the 7, and think a bad thing it's gonna happen to you,so I follow you, until here.You were medicated.How do you fell?"
"Shit! I didn't think he will did it to me,bastard!.....and where he is right now?"
"Oh! I did something that made him runaway, oh! probably everybody around here" I said and laughed a little."Let's get out of here now,Maybe they come back."
"However,Thank you." She said to me.
I walked to the front of the door.Still no anybody around here.She walked behind me closely,I smelled the perfume from her body.It so sweet,that redolent body.But I didn't satisfied yet,the weather,in underwear part arrived at my front side.He looked so angry.of cause! I saw the wound at his face that I did it.
"I guess you didn't involve with him" She said.
"Go to the fire exit now!"I just saw the way to avoid him and said.
and we were then running both,didn't look behind.
Just a few second,we came to the car park,it still has a few people around here.I look around for find my bike,it may be closely.Suddenly, I accidental saw the man who kidnapped the girl,Oh! he didn't leave yet.I whispered to her for get down. The distance between him and us not too far,we hid behind some car.For a while,I heard the man said,probably on the phone.
"I got a problem!,I can't recorded the video.Some guy rang the fire alarm.I have to run away before,just for the worse case that some body accidental see us.......No,she is sleeping,I sent someone to watch her right now...Yes!.......Umm.....,just wait for it clam.......Don't worry,however,we will got the video,certainly! "
"Shit!She 's gone."
I heard the sound insert.I perked up my face a little for saw someone speaking.Not the other,She is the old lady that involved about,She was running to the man.
"What!...but she was tied up."
"I think it's not a normal,someone rang the alarm and used that moment untied her and brought her ran....and I think I know who he is."
"And who! is that jerk?"
"The guy that knocked the door,he ware the waiter suit but I think he is not the waiter.....Are you followed by someone?"
"Ah! I knew it!,some bike rode behind me,when I cam
Shit! They knew about me.
"I found that bike.Not missed,I remember,right here!"
It's such a bad luck. And now, how can I go to take my bike! They both are watching now! How can I cope with them? I'm not dare to face them,such a cowardly guy,if you didn't mind to say that.I looked at her,She looks like some sleepy person.
OK! Perhaps I should call some back up.I took my phone and sent the massage to my friend for com