Hi everyone! I'm here for your help and need to improve my careful writing. Here the stories I wrote in present simple tense.
Story 1
She makes coffee in the morning and puts on her coat. Then she makes up in the closet room. She likes to smile at the mirror and sings when she is in a good mood. She does not smoke. In midday, her friends arrive at her home. Her friends push back the front door quietly, because her brother sleeps on the floor near the door. While her friends arrive, she is waiting in her living room and reads her book. They are play with her dog. The dog is very cute and happy when it sees her friend. She walks to the fridge and opens it, looking for sodas for her friends. Her brother wakes up and shouts to her friends to be quite. And she shouts back to her brother to go upstairs. But instead, he does not go upstairs but go outside and ride his bicycle to his friend’s house. Her brother cannot scold in the house due to the house’s rule. So that why he has to leave before his anger blast off and she will tell mom and dad. She meets with her friends and makes tea to drink in the afternoon. Her brother runs back to home with angry. He accuses her that she does not tell dad to repair his bicycle. He comes in and pushes everything in front of him with angry. She does not dare to yell at his brother when she sees that mom and dad arrive at home early. After that night she goes to bed and prays to aliens to kidnap her brother away.
Story 2
He wants to befriend her but she ignores him, because she does not believe in him. So, he hates himself for that and makes him boil all over his body. She knows him a very long time. Some time he closes himself alone in his room, a very small room. He cannot afford a bigger room because it costs too much for him. He intends to find a new job to make a living and more money for his tiny room. But he does not dare to quit his job, because he loves his boss. He likes to make a new friend, but nobody need to befriend him. What he need is someone who can be loves. And he always misses her, for a very long time. He cannot think of anyone else.
Thank you in advance for your attention.
Learning to write second language
Story 1
She makes coffee in the morning and puts on her coat. Then she makes up in the closet room. She likes to smile at the mirror and sings when she is in a good mood. She does not smoke. In midday, her friends arrive at her home. Her friends push back the front door quietly, because her brother sleeps on the floor near the door. While her friends arrive, she is waiting in her living room and reads her book. They are play with her dog. The dog is very cute and happy when it sees her friend. She walks to the fridge and opens it, looking for sodas for her friends. Her brother wakes up and shouts to her friends to be quite. And she shouts back to her brother to go upstairs. But instead, he does not go upstairs but go outside and ride his bicycle to his friend’s house. Her brother cannot scold in the house due to the house’s rule. So that why he has to leave before his anger blast off and she will tell mom and dad. She meets with her friends and makes tea to drink in the afternoon. Her brother runs back to home with angry. He accuses her that she does not tell dad to repair his bicycle. He comes in and pushes everything in front of him with angry. She does not dare to yell at his brother when she sees that mom and dad arrive at home early. After that night she goes to bed and prays to aliens to kidnap her brother away.
Story 2
He wants to befriend her but she ignores him, because she does not believe in him. So, he hates himself for that and makes him boil all over his body. She knows him a very long time. Some time he closes himself alone in his room, a very small room. He cannot afford a bigger room because it costs too much for him. He intends to find a new job to make a living and more money for his tiny room. But he does not dare to quit his job, because he loves his boss. He likes to make a new friend, but nobody need to befriend him. What he need is someone who can be loves. And he always misses her, for a very long time. He cannot think of anyone else.
Thank you in advance for your attention.