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Task 2
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Some people say that the best way to improve public health is by increasing the number of sports facilities. Others, however , say that this would have little effect on public health and that other measures are required.
Discuss both these views and give your own opinion
Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.
Intro There are many ways to improve public health one of the ways is increasing the number of sports facilities the sports facilities should be used by many people its would make people health in a good way.
Body 1 By increasing sports facilities people may have increased opportunity to do more outdoor activities in free time. People will have the good health from sports facilities, for example some people tried after work one of the best ways to relax is to exercise such as swimming or running.
From my experience exercise is the best method to improve people health therefore sport facility is the best way that people should have.
Body 2 However some people say that this would have little effect on public health , for example people may have good health if they have god behavior always exercise every morning and evening.
On the other hand, there are many measures to improve public health for instance, eat five foods groups , not stress and have enough rest.
Conclusion In conclusion increasing the number of sports facilities would make people health in a good way and it is a good way to improve public health, in contrast, its would have little effect on public health if people do not interested in.
However, there are many measures to improve public health such as always eat five food groups on time, not stress and have enough rest. In my opinion increasing the number of sports facilities is the best method to improve people health and public health in the better way.
ช่วยตรวจ ielts writing task 2 ให้ผมหน่อยครับ
ถ้าจะดีทิ้งเมลล์ให้ผมปรึกษาหน่อยนะครับ
Task 2
อันนี้ โจทย์ ครับ
Some people say that the best way to improve public health is by increasing the number of sports facilities. Others, however , say that this would have little effect on public health and that other measures are required.
Discuss both these views and give your own opinion
Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.
Intro There are many ways to improve public health one of the ways is increasing the number of sports facilities the sports facilities should be used by many people its would make people health in a good way.
Body 1 By increasing sports facilities people may have increased opportunity to do more outdoor activities in free time. People will have the good health from sports facilities, for example some people tried after work one of the best ways to relax is to exercise such as swimming or running.
From my experience exercise is the best method to improve people health therefore sport facility is the best way that people should have.
Body 2 However some people say that this would have little effect on public health , for example people may have good health if they have god behavior always exercise every morning and evening.
On the other hand, there are many measures to improve public health for instance, eat five foods groups , not stress and have enough rest.
Conclusion In conclusion increasing the number of sports facilities would make people health in a good way and it is a good way to improve public health, in contrast, its would have little effect on public health if people do not interested in.
However, there are many measures to improve public health such as always eat five food groups on time, not stress and have enough rest. In my opinion increasing the number of sports facilities is the best method to improve people health and public health in the better way.