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Q : Imagine that you are preparing for a trip. You plan to be away from your home for a year. Inaddition to clothing and personal care items, you can take one additional thing. What would you take and why? Use specific reasons and details to support your choice.

Ans. :    Traveling to somewhere which different from hometown is  a dream of many individuals. There are many new experiences  that travelers will earn from the journey. A carefully preparing for traveling is the most important thing that the travelers must be concern especially for the long time trip, because effective preparing will result the impressive experiences. In my opinion, If I have to bring something useful for the traveling exclude clothing and personal care items I will choose mobile phone because of several reasons.
    First of all, Loosing the way back to my hotel can be happened easily in the unfamiliar place. Many people in some countries not only can’t speak English but also be shy for the foreigners and try to stay away from them. Therefore, keeping the hotel’s phone number in my mobile phone is very useful not only to ask the receptionist for the way back to hotel but also to ask them for recommendation about other traveling place suddenly.
    Second, for the recently world, there are a lot of thieves in many countries’.  If I face those unfortunate situations without emergency call, I may lose all of my pocket money and in the worst case all other important things such as passport or credit card may be robed without helping.
    On the other hand, when I meet new friends during the trip, I would like to ask them their phone number in order to invite them to travel with me anytime that our times are matched. Those will bring our relationship growth continually and rapidly.
    All in all, for a lot of advantages I will gain when I bring mobile phone with me while travelling, I strongly recommend all travelers who would like to have a good memory and get some impressive experiences should not ignore keeping mobile phone with you all the travelling time.
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